<p>I took a risk with the lead of my essay to capture attention. I have
gotten mixed feedback where most people really enjoy it, but some
dislike the impression it creates. I would like a concrete answer one
way or the other *to clear up my worries. Any insight would be
appreciated. Pm me if you can read it</p>
<p>If some people find it bad, you should bet that maybe the adcoms would too. Why risk it?</p>
<p>I’ll take a look if you like. where are you applying? A lot of people say that for the UCs, you want a dramatic hook.</p>
<p>I’ll take a look and tell you what I think. I’m a senior, but I’ve already applied ED and written an essay that I’m very, very happy with.</p>
<p>I’ll read it if you want!!</p>