<p>I guess my time limit expired, so here's what I came up with so far:</p>
<p>" After a while though I entered a period of depression, not wanting to eat anything that resulted in my suffering from significant nourishment issues." - Wowo. Clean this up, dude. </p>
<p>"in spite of her efforts to break free of the marital bonds that hamper her progression, she remains stagnant and inert, as she has no impetus to compel her to do so." really reads "she has no impetus to compel her to remain stagnant and inert." The whole thing is awkwardly structured and pretentiously phrased.</p>
<p>"When her friend Aissatou though enters a similar situation"</p>
<p>What's up with the "though?" You did it here, too: "After a while though I entered a period of depression." Don't do that.</p>
<p>"The quote "we most resent in others the very flaws that we ourselves possess" deals with one main issue regarding the human idiosyncrasy- its confrontational nature. "</p>
<p>Should be a full colon between "idiosyncracy" and "its."</p>
<p>There is no defining human idiosyncrasy.</p>
<p>Whose confrontational nature? "The human idiosyncracy's," or the main issue's?</p>
<p>"Ramatoulaye is forced to confront with her own situation"</p>
<p>You don't confront "with" something; you just confront it. </p>
<p>"as she cannot bear the sight of her friend's torment, a torment that she herself is vehemently experiencing but could not recognize in the past because she did not possess a mirror. "</p>
<p>What a trainwreck -- I'm not sure where to start.</p>