SAP Appeal finacial aid HELP!

this is a very rough draft i just typed up. what can i change improve? do i have a chance?

To Whom it may concern,

    My name is , I have been a student here at Sam Houston State University since fall 2012. Though my time here I have faced many strides as well as many challenges in meeting my goals for success as a student. Iam writing this letter in hopes of appealing the suspension of my aid due to lack of SAP compliance thank you for taking the time to consider my request for reinstatement of my aid for the coming terms.

As you may already be know I lost my aid due to lack of SAP compliance in the spring of 2013 due to overwhelming stress, anxiety, om issues in my personal life that caused me to fail almost every class and fall short the prior semester. I was able to go above and beyond during the spring 2013 semester and get back on my feet and won my appeal as well there after. But my mental health issues ran deeper then I could have imagined at the time my symptoms we small but evident but because I continously was able to push through and managed to stay on track acedemically through the 2013-2014 term and beginning of the 2014-2015 term though my issues grew more and more problematic with the severity of my anxiety and depression progressing rapidly I still believed I could push through and it wasn’t an issue that required professional attention,but I was in denial. I went in to the 2015 semester in a bad place I was sill in compliance with sap and that would be the semester that would make or break me and it broke me. My personal life to a major hit causing my already very evident issues to spiral out of control. I had gotten to the point where my anxiety attacks went from every so often to weekly to daily. It had gotten so bad that the thought of facing anything or anyone would set me off. I didn’t eat or sleep I dropped weight rapidly and I was always sick. I failed all but one course in which I did very poorly I had to drop the course I was undoubtedly going to fail in order to salvage my GPA. My academic past though its comendability decreased as my symptoms increased prove that this was not like me. I was put on grace for the summer and advised to take summer courses to get back on track. So I as I was advised .but at this point my mental health had gotten to severe my anxiety attacks became as often as 2 to 3 times a day random crying spells it got to the point where I was just in a content state of anxiety and couldn’t even get through simply daily activities. I failed both courses. Mi felt I could no longer go on and at the beginning of the second session I finally sought out the help I so desperately needed I began seeing a psychologist at the counseling and health center weekly and was later in my visits advised to o for a mental health check up at the health center clinic and was diagnosed with anxiety and depression. I was prescribed medication for both (Zoloft for anxiety and depression and Ativan for anxiety attacks). And though my performance was less then commendable it was an improvement and I pulled through the second session.

I have come to find the key to my success here at SAM lies in getting my anxiety and depression under control, and now I have the tools to do so. the things I have put in place and my plan for the upcoming semester so I can be successful is as follows:I have signed up for a mentor at the SAM center through the VIP program. I will continue to see my therapist at the counseling center for the rest of my time here at SAM as well as attend group sessions for anxiety. I will be having monthly check ins with the health clinic to keep track of my medication and adjust as needed. I have moved out of my old apartment and in with close friends as a constant support system. I have an academic plan from my advisory and will be taking only general studies courses for the coming semesters until I get those out of the way.

In conclusion I understand that aid id only meant for students who have the caliber but couldn’t purse their studies due to poor financial conditions. I respect that very much. I take full responsibility for falling behind. I feel I am finally truly in a secure place to finish my education here at Sam no that I have found the true issue and am getting it under control. I have come to far, been through to much, and achieved to much here to have to walk away and due to my financial situation it would have to be for good. Anxiety and depression are serious things that can dramatically effect ones everyday life especially if left untreated for so long. But with proper treatment education and monitoring one can achieve great things. I have all those thing now and feel like I can go above above and beyond just as I have done before. I have big dreams and graduating from SAM is one of them and is the foundation for all the rest. I know what I want I know what I have to do to get it and now I have what I need to get it. I know getting back on track will not be easy but it is not impossible and I know now that I can truly do it and I will not let my self or my university down. Thank you for putting my appeal into consideration.

What does “faced many strides” mean?

Letter is way too long. Get to the point. You need to tell what you have already done to help your self, and what you plan to do to continue to help yourself.

Remember, yours isn’t the only letter they will be reading. Just state the facts…succinctly.

Also, take some time to proofread for spelling and grammar errors.

Agree with @thumper1, this letter is too long and makes too many “excuses”.

Write a one-pager. State that you are currently under a physician’s care with physicians office info. A couple of sentences at best deferring to your physician for further info.
Delineate what you have scheduled for the upcoming year with documented appointments (who, what, when, where).
Note the classes you want to take with expected grades.

That’s it.
Fix all of your grammatical and spelling errors. A university student should know the difference between: to, too, two.

Is there any possibility that you could do a retroactive withdrawal for the semesters that your health issues severally impacted your grades? This would remove those grades and credits from your record. Not sure if you would have to repay any FA that you received for those semesters. If you were being treated at the time and have documentation, then it would worth be checking out this option. The counselling center at your school should be able to help you with this.