Sap appeal letter

<p>Please any suggestions on my appeal. This is my first appeal! </p>

<p>RE: Letter of Appeal</p>

<p>Dear Appeal Board:</p>

<p>My name is _____ and I am writing this letter in humble hopes of appealing the suspension of my financial aid for the 2013 fall semester. The fall and spring semesters were a very stressful and overwhelming time in my life because of family distresses. My aunt passed away on June 2nd 2013. Though her passing didn’t happen while school was in session, the countless hospital visits, train rides home and phone calls on her current state was always the first thing on my mind from morning to night. It was very difficult for me to concentrate and do well in my classes when I had to put my family ahead of myself. I do realize that I neglected my studies and I would like another chance to do better in them. I have compiled a list of concrete steps I need to take in order to be successful in school. I appreciate the opportunity to explain to you how my previous personal situation hindered my academic performance and how the changes I have made will prevent these issues from recurring. Below I have discussed and deliberated a distinct track step by step of what I will do to improve my situation to get back on the right path. Strategies I will use to improve my academic performance is first take charge of the opportunity I am given at ____. First, I will obtain a calendar or planner and enter in all my classes, exams, and papers, and professors' office hours. That way, I’ll have a plan for what I should be doing as the semester progresses. Attend office hours as much as possible to talk with each of my professors personally to discuss the course goals and my progress toward them, so that if I should have difficulty in class I will obtain tutoring in order to understand the material. I’ll devote for time to studying as required. Next, budget my time each week by finding an appropriate study environment. No devices, no social networking, no friends—just my mind up against the work. I’ll make sure to utilize the use of all the schools resources and manage my time wisely so that I can better balance family and studies together. I do realize that I have disregarded my studies in the past. Nonetheless, I have learned from my past mistakes. With my counselor's assistance, we planned out a more manageable course load for next semester. I’ve recognized the real issues, taken full accountability for them and have created an effective action plan for improving my grades. Please allow me the opportunity to prove myself and succeed. It is for this and the aforementioned other reasons that I kindly ask you to reconsider my financial aid. I will be patiently waiting for your re-evaluation response of my financial circumstances. I have attached supporting documents.</p>

<pre><code> Sincerely,
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<p>There is no point in appealing and the letter is terrible and way too long anyway.</p>

<p>BrownParent, why in heavens name would you post such a snotty comment? I assume OP is appealing because the school offers such a process, so there is, indeed, a “point” in the effort. And why not offer constructive criticism of the letter instead of a useless “terrible and too long”? </p>

<p>OP, I do agree that the letter is too long, and it needs to be separated into paragraphs. The first sentence should be its own paragraph. Drop the “in humble hopes”, which adds nothing, and just say “I am writing to appeal the suspension…” The sentence beginning “I have compiled” should begin a third paragraph. Delete the next two sentences, which add nothing. List the steps you plan to take as bullet points. Your last paragraph should start with the sentence “I’ve recognized…”</p>

<p>Please revise as noted and let’s take another look. I think you’ll need to streamline the future steps section, but I want to see the bullet point format first.</p>

<p>Agreed - simply inserting paragraph breaks would be a huge improvement. OP, do you know someone who could help you edit your letter?</p>