SAT essay again.

<p>Here goes an essay i've just written.
Anyone want to score it?</p>

<p>Prompt:</p>

<p>A colleague of the great scientist James Watson remarked that Watson was always “lounging around, arguing about problems instead of doing experiments.” He concluded that “ There is more than one way of doing good science.” It was Watson’s form of idleness, the scientist went on to say, that allowed him to solve “the greatest of all biological problems: the discovery of the structure of DNA.” It is a point worth remembering in a society overly concerned with efficiency.</p>

<p>Assignment:</p>

<p>Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to do things their own way? Plan and write an essay……</p>

<p>My Response:</p>

<p>Every person has his or her own opinion towards tackling certain situations in life. When told to accomplish a task, he or she will try the method which is best for him or her. In many cases, I think he or she will accomplish that task as effectively as possible if he or she is allowed to do it his or her own way.</p>

<p>Let’s take examinations for instance. There is no hard and fast rule as to how a student should prepare for a test. For one student simply mugging up may be the best way to remember essentials. For another, relating those essentials to certain logics may work. Take the SAT test for instance. I’ve gone through many test preparation books to learn strategies that I hoped might help me in the test. However, I have learned that many of those strategies simply don’t work for me. Consequently, I’ve had to develop my own method of dealing with SAT questions which I believe will get me a better score than the other strategies will.</p>

<p>Besides, turning the pages of history, we can see numerous examples of cases that support my stance. I would like to cite botanist Charles Darwin as an instance of a person who did things his own way and accomplished a lot. Darwin’s parents pushed him to be a priest, an occupation that thought was best for him. Yet, Darwin did things his own way and later turned up as a botanist who accomplished and contributed a great deal in the field of science.</p>

<p>Another instance can be the Indian Revolution too. Indian Revolution was a success because violence and peace joined forces against the English colonists. Bhagat Singh, a rebel leader, did things his own way: the violent way. Mahatma Gandhi rebelled in his own way: the peaceful way. Consequently, when both leaders did things their own way, they accomplished their common goal, i.e. the liberation of India.</p>

<p>All these instances provide a valuable insight. People should not be cajoled into accepting ways which they are not comfortable with. They should be given the freedom to choose their won ways. Only this will bring out the best in them.</p>

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<p>good essay.
3rd line of 3rd para is gramatically wrong. i know that it must have been a typing error.
relevant points.
flows well.
well done.</p>

<p>its brilliant 6… i guess he or she is repeated too much in the first para… i dnt think it matters if u just say he instead of he/she… </p>

<p>except that its very good, 3 examples gr8… and that too all three were relevant… good flow… </p>

<p>u will definatly get 6/6… hehe…</p>

<p>ohhhhh ok
thanks panic.
next time i’ll take care.</p>

<p>gr8 flow… really like the essay…</p>

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You’re welcome.</p>

<p>The essay looks good, by the way. You’re sure to get into Amherst with an 800 in Writing, and things are looking up :)</p>

<p>whoa.
great reviews.
i’m fearing i might slack off my prep now. lol</p>

<p>@kyabaal
it wasn’t a typing error.</p>

<p>won ways? or own ways?</p>

<p>Darwin’s parents pushed him to be a priest, an occupation that thought was best for him.</p>

<p>should be… …to become a priest, a vocation that they thought was best suited for him.</p>

<p>@mom2college
won own …typing error.</p>

<p>and yes thanks for pointing out the error. I realize it.
So what score would you give?</p>

<p>bump
10 char</p>

<p>I think this would easily be a 5. Good examples and a good flow. Although I think you jumped onto examples too quickly. In fact I see that in a lot of essays. Very less general paragraphs and opinions about the topics and too much emphasis on the examples. Is that what the SAT readers want?</p>

<p>Still pretty good though, an easy 5 or a reachy 6.</p>

<p>yeah i noticed the jumping to examples. i do it because i find it hard to fit in three examples with the general paragraphs. I dunno if the readers want that or not.</p>