SAT essay. This saturday is the day! Grade it please :)

<p>Barrons SAT Prep question:</p>

<h2>What are your thoughts on the idea that neither time nor opportunity can determine intimacy? what causes two people to become friends?</h2>

<p>The concept of destiny is a cliche used in many movies, novels and songs. Two people fall in love at first sight. In spite of the limited time provided to them, their love matures to be very intimate and deep. As the media portrays this "fast" establishment of firm relationship in such dramatic ways, many people deny the existence of "destiny" in the real world. However, quite surprisingly it is prevalent in our world and I have personally experienced it.</p>

<p>The time spent together by people in certain relationships is an inevitable factor to the firmness of their relationship. However the fact of knowing each other for ten years does not establish an intimate relationship. Some people are destined to be met, to connect and to become close friends for the remainder of their lives. People that do not get along despite the duration of their acquaintance are like oil and water; they do not mix even when left for years. My parents portray the idea of 'destiny' quite well. With such high divorce rates these days, it is significant for a spouse to withhold their stable form. My mother and father dated for only a month before they got married. Few days ago was their twentieth wedding anniversary. Essentially, it is possible to say that time does not matter when it comes to the establishment of intimacy. It is his or her natural disposition and attractiveness that build the foundation of intimacy.</p>

<p>Everyone has a unique personality and it is extremely rare to find your counter part - your soulmate. However if you manage to find that person, how much time you spent with him or her is not taken into account. It is very natural to feel that even you have known that person for only awhile you still feel the connection, the link and the intimacy. I have a close friend, a soulmate I can say. It was an exciting experience when I became friends with her, because in such short time we developed intimacy.In contrast I have another friend, who I have known for years, but do not do much other than occasional greetings on facebook. It is not the length of time that determines the value of friendship. If two people have strong affinity with each other, that affinity is strong enough to penetrate the barrier of time. </p>

<p>The reason why the media portrays 'destiny' in such glamorous and beautified way is that everyone secretly desires it. It is attractive and mysterious because it possesses the power of breaking hard barriers like the concept of time. Time nor opportunity does not matter when two people are strongly attracted to each other. The force of the attraction is strong enough to penetrate even the most impervious things. </p>

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<p>Thank you in advance!!!!:)
criticisms, suggestions are all welcomed.</p>

<p>Sweet. I like your metaphorical use comparing bonds formed like oil and water! It’s very personal! The polar opposite of my essay on intimacy and it will probably score higher too</p>