<p>2.
Running outdoors burns about five percent more </p>
<p>calories than (if you are running on a treadmill, </p>
<p>in part this is because there is) greater wind </p>
<p>resistance outdoors. </p>
<p>(A) if you are running on a treadmill, in part this </p>
<p>is because there is </p>
<p>(B) if you run on a treadmill, in part because of the </p>
<p>(C) when running on a treadmill, in part because </p>
<p>of the </p>
<p>(D) running on a treadmill, which is in part because </p>
<p>of the </p>
<p>(E) running on a treadmill, in part because there is</p>
<p>I choose D, but the answer is E. How can D not work?</p>
<p>D is wordy and a little awkward. Don’t talk about something that you can talk in lesser terms. </p>
<p>For example,</p>
<p>Instead of: “I had an awesome, wonderful, and amazing day. I went to the amusement park to ride on roller coasters, and I also ate cotton candy there. In addition, I went to this awesome restaurant that served lobster, steak, crab, salad, soup, and shrimp!”</p>
<p>Write: “I had a wonderful day. I went to the amusement park and had fun. I also went to a restaurant where they serve excellent food.”</p>
<p>While the first sentence might seem okay in terms of regular high-school essays, SAT people don’t like that kind of stuff.</p>
<p>Correct me if I’m wrong.</p>
<p>“Which is” is not necessary.</p>
<p>Thank you very much!!!</p>