SAT prep - Rate my essay please (?/6)

<p>That would be my first practice test, and it's only 3 days for my SAT to come. </p>

<p>Please rate my essay on a scale of 1-6, and feel free to criticize my style and point out my mistakes. I'd be more than grateful. Thank you.</p>

<p>PROMPT: IS THE WAY SOMETHING SEEMS TO BE NOT ALWAYS THE SAME AS IT ACTUALLY IS ? </p>

<p>Essay : </p>

<p>Perspective and angle make a paramount difference when it comes to human judgement. This is why things don't always look the way they actually are. Examples from both literature and cinema support this position.</p>

<p>In his famous novel, 1984, George Orwell narrates the life of a young man, named Winston, who, forced to obey, lived his days in the shadow of a totalitarian government. However, one day, he falls in love with a beautiful lady he occasionally gets to meet. By this incriminating romance, he decides to both soothe his swollen heart and rebel against the tyranny. From his perspective, this love would have stood tall against anything. Therefore, to Wilson, those noble feelings could never change in the future. He thought he'd stay the same. Little did he know, a few months of incarceration managed to turn him into another. His soul had changed and so had his once loving heart. One could even argue he hated the woman, and he unquestionably had lost the power his used to have over his once lively mind. According to Orwell, things had eventually changed once us, the reader, and the main character started perceiving matters from a different pair of spectacles. In other words, the gilded rock had lost its shine, unveiling a new story with an identical handwriting. The story of a new man whose heart had transformed and to him things had once been all in pink and red. </p>

<p>Just as many pieces of literature yield, the surprising turns and twists our perception can take are also demonstrated in movies. "Memento", in which the main character is a vengeance-seeking man who had lost his short-term memory along with his molested wife, is a great example. By the end of the film, or the beginning of the events, for it's a chronologically inverse movie, we learn that David had actually been the once who had killed his own wife, accidentally. He doesn't remember, of course, but he was actually living in his own imagination, for he thought he had no more purpose in life, and that pursuing such a noble cause would guarantee him a sure, albeit momentary happiness. Again, a perspective twist puts us in the bitter reality, and actions that had once appeared to be, even though illegal, perfectly justifiable, became hideous and deprived of humanity. </p>

<p>By analyzing the aforementioned examples, and by way of conclusion, it is unequivocal that perception can sometimes be deceitful, and that absolute truth should never be a pragmatic's objective. One never surely knows, for George Orwell's or Memento's main characters could actually be others, different from what their stories had to say.</p>

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