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<p>Should people take responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general?</p>

<p>In recent years, there has been a growing trend among people to believe in the limiting of government involvement in people’s lives due to its hampering of individuality. However, government involvement has been and will remain imperative to the stability of the United States. This assertion is widely supported by political evidence from the American revolution and economic evidence from the Great Depression which shows that people often need help from the government to solve problems that are unsolvable by themselves.
During the 1700s, American colonists were fed up with unrepresented taxation from the British. Pockets of anti-British colonists sprang up by the late 1760s and their growing influence led to a majority of anti-British sentiment in the colonies by the early 1770s. This growing support of revolution did not, however, undermine the very intimidating challenge that faced the patriots: The organization of the colonies under a united government. Without a government, the colonists would have trouble relaying information, be unrecognizable by other nations (such as the critical French allies), and ultimately be unable to win a war against the largest military power in the world at the time. This challenge, would, however, be dealt with by political leaders of the time such as Ben Franklin and Thomas Jefferson. The Continental Congresses, through their unity of the colonists, would serve as the government for the soon-to-be United States. The Congresses became the centers of inter-colonial information, diplomatic centers for foreign leaders, and economic centers to keep the colonies as economically united as possible. Without the Congresses’ creation, the dreams of a divided people would never have been met.
150 years into United States history, the world was in economic turmoil. The Great Depression left many broke and many more unemployed. The main cause of it was laissez-faire economics of the roaring 20s. Lack of government regulation led to uncontrolled spending and extremities in the economic cycle. It wasn’t until the work of Franklin D. Roosevelt’s New Deal programs brought the sunken economy back up afloat. It was so successful that many who viewed regulation as a sin embraced it with the advent of the New Deal. The New Deal, with some of the most involved government acts in United States history, saved the nation from the worst economic situation in its history, something citizens couldn’t do by themselves.
Some may hate it, but none can dismiss the importance of government regulation. The government serves as a big hand that helps regular citizens achieve things that are too large to achieve by themselves and this hand will continue to help as long as the issues exist.</p>

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<li>It is difficult to read.</li>
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<p>lolwut? How is it difficult to read?</p>

<p>Funky grammar. Lack of spacing. Too short of an introduction. Didn’t quite answer the prompt.</p>

<p>The prompt is terrible. But, if that is how it was worded, you have to do the best you can.</p>

<p>You need a space between paragraphs to avoid the look of the blob of words. That is crucial. (You may have had that space in a Word format, but you need to double-check your post to see if the format transferred)</p>

<p>You gave good historical background, but you need to make it clear just what your viewpoint is.</p>

<p>The grammar is fine (I didn’t go over it with a fine-toothed comb).</p>

<p>Be more concrete with your language. Don’t make vague wide assertions. Don’t be afraid to say “Tea Party” in your intro, for example.</p>