Score my essay out of 12 please.

<p>Do you think that ease does not challenge us and that we need adversity to help us discover who we are?</p>

<p>The feeling of ease and comforts makes us as humans feel safe - too safe, perhaps - that we will do nothing by merely sit back, relax, and enjoy that very sense of secuirty. Ease inhibits us from setting out into the world, though, because we are already satisfied with our current situation, which is more than enough for our lives, and do not feel the need to do so; that reason is exactly why adversity is necessary to help us discover we are in our lives - to go out into the world and face adventures - as shown by Guy Montag in Fahrenheit 451 and Bilbo Baggins in The Hobbit.</p>

<p>Guy Montag, the protagonist in Fahrenheit 451, lives in a society where cares drive at over 100 mph, where people do not ask questions or spend time with each other, and where books are burned and set on fire (instead of being put out) by firemen - which Guy's very occupation, on the basis that those books alike contain material that is harmful to society and the human race. Guy finally takes a new outlook on the meaning of his life and his job when he meets Clarisse McClellan, his neighbor who goes against the norms of his society by reading, asking questions, and having fun with others. He realizes that he is being oppressed when he encounters, on his job, an elderly lady who throws herself into the flames in which her books are being burned by Guy and his fellow firemen, and that the life he leads is not one that accurately reflects who he really is - caring, gregarious, and learning. With the help of Professor Faber, Guy must endure through many hardships to go against the authoritative despots who rules his society - facing the attempted suicide of his wife, Mildred, and the murder of Clarisse McClellan; defying Captain Beatty and the authorities; manipulating around the Mechanical Hound; and escaping the flames he sets on his town.</p>

<p>In The Hobbit, Bilbo Baggins lives a peaceful life in his little house under a moun - eating good food and little treats, sleeping, and playing music with the fairies in the village that visit him. He is suddenly faced by the wizard, gandalf, who presents Bilbo with the task of going on an adventure. Bilbo immediately at first rejects the formidable duty but realizes that the fate of slaying an evil dragon lies on his shoulders. In his journey, he must confront and fight gruesome monsters, like trolls, goblins, and Wargs, and overcome a myriad of his fears. The little hobbit goes from being a nervous coward who prefers the quiet life to a bold hero with courage and tenacity - a transformation that permitted him to uncover who he really was but one that could not have been fulfilled without difficult obstacles.</p>

<p>Guy Montag from Fahrenheit 451 and Bilbo Baggins from The Hobbit start out as chracters who muddle through their everyday lives, intimidated by "rocking the boat" and disturbing the peace and the "ease" they possess in their lives. However, by undergoing challenges through perilous journeys, they discovered who they really were: characters who could take risks and go against the rules. They show how people need to sometimes be thrusted into a path with adversities to truly find out who they really are.</p>

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<p>Irrelevant.</p>

<p>Your first example has nothing to do with the prompt at all.</p>

<p>You could possible get a 10 if you are extremely lucky, but no higher. This would probably yield a score less than 10.</p>

<p>^ Oy. I left out a sentence before the last sentence for the first example when I was typing. Here it is, maybe that’s why it seemed off-topic:</p>

<p>Guy Montag sets out on a quest that bears events of suffering and difficulties that allow him to find who he is as a person and his purpose in life.</p>

<p>How is “burning books” irrelevant? I am merely providing a description of the society that Guy lives in to show what he must face when he sets out on his journey and to show how different it is from our society. The action of burning books is actually the focus of the whole book. o.o</p>

<p>Sorry, I meant redundancy.</p>

<p>Burned and set on fire are exactly the same thing; there is no need to put both of them. It also doesn’t make sense when you say books should be put out instead of being set out on fire, because if books were not set on fire, then no putting out would be needed.</p>

<p>Oh lol I should have put set on fire only then.</p>

<p>Can anybody else give me feedback please?</p>