Share your personal statement (and let's chance each other)

<p>Now that UC apps are finally over, I'm curious to see how everyone else answered the questions: </p>

<p>Prompt #1 (transfer applicants)
What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field — such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities — and what you have gained from your involvement. </p>

<p>Prompt #2 (all applicants)
Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?</p>

<p>if you want other people to post their statements, then you should start by providing yours first.</p>

<p>nah, not gonna risk anyone stealing it to apply next year.</p>

<p>You first, ecullen.</p>

<p>this is what I wrote last year:</p>

<p>prompt 1:</p>

<p>I will be double majoring in humanities and history of art. I did it cuz it doesn’t have any prereqs and this way, I could obtain my high GPA of a 3.45 (which I consider to be a great accomplishment). With my degree from the University of California, I plan on joining the homeless population as my skill-set will be useless and my debt large. I will not be able to contribute to a necessary function of our society, so I will choose to drain it of its resources. I’m thinking Berkeley is a good location…but LA needs some hobos also. Let me the f u ck in now BIT CHez!!!</p>

<p>prompt 2:</p>

<p>My talent is getting the farthest with the least amount of work, that’s how I got my 3.6 (you read it right…a 3.6…i rounded up) and that’s how I know you’re going to let me into your university even though this is a run on sentence because i know I am fit to be at your school cuz I am good enough like the dove commercial tells me. </p>

<p>that’s how I got into UCLA and Cal. the top 2 public schools in the nation (yay! UCLA moved up to #2…give them 10 years and they’ll be at #1). What it do OP?? lead by example.</p>

<p>This isn’t a wise idea at all. Asking for the public posting of essays is pushing it. </p>

<p>Leave it to posting stats and EC’s only.</p>

<p>Maybe it’s just me… </p>

<p>But my first initial impression upon reading OP’s words is that he/she just wants an abridged summary of what we wrote, and not a copy-paste job of what we submitted on the application. </p>

<p>I could be soooo wrong. In that case, screw you OP!</p>

<p>Well, for the first one I told them what my major was, and why I chose it.</p>

<p>no the OP wanted to read our FULL statements. if he/she wants a summary, here’s what i put:</p>

<p>Prompt 1:</p>

<p>I stated my intended major. I discussed how my interest in the subject developed and described my experience that I have have had in the field — such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities — and what I have gained from my involvement.</p>

<p>Prompt 2:
I just talked about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to me. I talked about how this makes me proud and how it relates to the person I am.</p>

<p>^ omgzz, no wai. did choo guys raelly do dat?</p>

<p>Oh wait, that’s just a carbon copy of the prompt, except you added ‘I’ in there</p>

<p>LOL @ LAKERS. such a dick move but hilarious nonetheless</p>

<p>This thread is fail but the lols make up for it.</p>

<p>oo a fan of twilight</p>

<p>i wanna share my ps topics but nobody’s participating and i’m shy hehe =X</p>

<p>Here’s an abridged version of my prompts, hopes the OP likes it.</p>

<p>Prompt 1:</p>

<p>Blah blah blah blah…my major and some of my experiences with my major are: blah blah blah and blah.</p>

<p>Prompt 2: Some of my personal talents, qualities, and accomplishments are blah and blah. And some of the reasons why these talents and skills will contribute to my major are blah blah.</p>

<p>That’s basically the gist of it, with maybe a blah or two added in.</p>

<p>Chance me please!
Applying at: Berkeley</p>

<p>-4.0 GPA (so far)
-sociology major
-Transferring from California community college
-EC:
*secretary and publicity chair of honors psychology club
*candystriper 2 years
*lifeguard for the city for 4 years
-based my entire essay on why i need to go to berkeley since i only applied there. (i know very very risky and i am regretting it more and more every day). </p>

<p>Thanks everyone:)</p>

<p>is sociology impacted? i think you’re good but your essay topic, though flattering, is iffy</p>

<p>Berkeley girl, consider this anecdote: </p>

<p>-I applied for transfer to only one school last year (non-UC) and I talked about how it was the only place I had applied to, etc, and they ended up rejecting my application :(.</p>

<p>-I know I can’t establish a causal relationship between my rejection and my essay topic (could have been my mediocre HS grades, for example), but still, I wouldn’t do it again.</p>

<p>Also, I’m uber-procrastinating right now so I wanna kill some more time; I’m gonna imagine what might be running through a douchy adcom’s head while they’re evaluating your app. This is like the ultimate worst case scenario; you’re definitely in IMO.</p>

<p>“To me, it shows that she’s rigid; she’s so focused on our school that she didn’t even apply anywhere else. Talk about irrational. Surely a “lower” UC could fulfill her educational needs if she weren’t accepted to her first choice? More broadly, what does this say about her personality? Is she unwilling to compromise? Does she see everything as all or nothing? Is the type of student who’ll contribute to a healthy academic and social environment at Berkeley?”</p>

<p>Lol.</p>

<p>TBH though, I think it would have been enough to mention that Berkeley was your #1. What you did might have been a little risky, but w/e, you have a great shot with your record, esp. since you’re coming from a CCC.</p>

<p>Wow, I can’t believe they didnt admit you after you only applied there! Thats really scary! But in my personal statement, my reasoning behind why I can only go to berkeley was not only because its my first choice but also I explained that due to financial difficulties i can only either go to uci (right next to my house) or berkeley(i have relatives i could stay with). So I’ m hoping i didnt come off as pretentious or cocky. :/</p>