Short (~400 word) common app essay that needs critique

College Essays
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<p>Anyone mind reading over it</p>

<p>Thanks in advance :)</p>

2

<p>Yes Please!</p>

3

<p>Bump</p>

<p>Anyone else?</p>

4

<p>PM me!! I will give it a shot!!</p>

5

<p>You can send it to me in a PM and I’ll give it a look!
:D</p>

6

<p>I’ll read over it.</p>