<p>I'm writing my common app personal statement on: Write about an experience/achievement and its impact on me.
I wrote a little intro, but I have two bodies. One is describing to experience/achievement, the other is ending with how it changed me, its impact, etc. </p>
<p>For when I write the experience, how vivid and descriptive should I get, at the moment it really isn't a vivid picture to the reader. But if I make longer that part of the body, I'd be writing more about the experience rather than myself....</p>
<p>My essay is 534 words at the moment. </p>
<p>Do I want to make it longer and describe a vivid story, while also making the part about myself longer too?</p>