Ok. After the first paragraph, you could have the bones, edit and polish this for an essay. But to warn you, the line about Yale encouraging kids to get involved may seem generic, because many colleges encourage this. You don’t want to seem limited by not realizing this. There’s even a thread now about other colleges… http://talk.qa.collegeconfidential.com/college-search-selection/2103238-very-good-altruistically-minded-colleges-p2.html
I know you are limited, but you’d want to pump this writing up in the right ways, combine it with a narrative, then give it your own flourish. And turn it into the right angle (here, it’s an explanation.)
On one hand, you’ve told us (various posts) of these limits. A tippy top wants to see the awareness/compassion, vision, energy, follow through. Otoh, the stab you’re making is with little kids. Good. But we’re talking Yale. The best of the competition will have done more. I believe you can convert what you just wrote into something very positive.
Think about it. You now seem more activated, how can you tap this for the app?
But, see how you just personalized this. Not your limits but your drives to do more? You can use “show, not just tell.”