<p>The "risky" one is about my hair and how it used to make me self-conscious and how i now embrace it. It concludes with a tie to a famous poem (like comparing the subject of the poem and my hair)</p>
<p>The "safe" essay is about how I founded a club at my school -- how i was nervous but conquered the first meeting. then i go on to talk about my career goals and what i hope to achieve in college.</p>
<p>I'm applying to Ivys and a lot of other top schools, so which one do you think would be better?</p>
<p>I would read them over again thoroughly and ask yourself, “Which tells more about ME.” In my opinion, it might be better to take a risk. The schools you are applying to probably wants to see essays that are abstract and unique instead of formulaic essays which they are swamped with. But if your other essay says more about you, then go with that.</p>
<p>Needs to be interesting. Needs to relate your PERSONALITY- most essays don’t even ask for your college/career goals. If you are applying to top schools, I assure you, they know why you are applying! Make sure your personality and uniqueness reallly comes through the essay.</p>
<p>1st one. It definitely stands out. It’s up to you to make it a great essay that describes you. If you are iffy then the essay will come out iffy. If you have confidence then it’ll come out strong.</p>
<p>One of my good friends (a girl) is writing about a disease that caused her to lose all her hair. Her final copy was awesome and it had good humor.</p>
<p>Risky! Second one sounds like the essay of some typical, boring suburban kid who grew up doing nothing and thinking nothing. Your first one fleshes you out, I like it.</p>