I think it’s ok to include jargon as long as you are clear what the jargon is referring to. It’s a narrative style that could work if it’s done well. But don’t forget that you have limited word count and that line takes up valuable space. If it looks like you’re including it for the word count or if it takes space away from stuff that better shows who you are as a person and applicant, it shouldn’t be in there.
If you do want to keep the jargon, I wouldn’t start out with it. Establish first that you are looking at a computer in anticipation.
I’m not an admission officer so take that for what it’s worth.