Significant Achievement - College Essay

<p>Can someone check and edit my essay? I need opinions as well. If it's not that good, can you suggest any other topics from the common application that I can write about?
Topics include:
• Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.
• Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.
• Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.
• Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.
• A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community.</p>

<p>As my sophomore year was coming to an end, it was time for me to decide which AP classes I would take for my junior year. Once I heard about the work that was involved in an AP class, I started to worry. Questions started forming in my mind; How hard will the May AP exam be? How much homework would I have each day? Will I have tests and quizzes every single week? Will I be able to maintain my grades while taking an AP class? This would be the first time that I would be taking an AP course. However, junior year, my options were limited. The only options I had were to take AP Chemistry, AP Statistics or both. However, I did not want to risk getting low grades on my transcript, so I only took AP Chemistry. This felt like one of the most important decisions I would have to make during my high school career.</p>

<pre><code>When the first day of school arrived, I was ready to take the challenge. My teacher, Dr. Chan, began explaining his expectations. Despite my worries, I tried to remain as calm as possible. Moments later, he handed out a pop-quiz on Chemistry topics and I could not believe it. Fortunately, I remembered some information when I was studying for the Chemistry Regents during my sophomore year. After the quiz I felt relieved, and I felt even more relieved when Dr. Chan informed us that the quiz did not count as part of our grades. Days passed and I felt very stressed out with the numerous hours of homework I was receiving each night. However, I was determined to do my best and overcome the challenge. Dr. Chan was a great teacher; he was always there to help out and stay after school if students did not understand a concept. Weeks passed and I was getting decent grades on my tests. Although I did not get the grades I had anticipated on my tests, I was able to attain high 80s and low 90s in the class. The AP Exam was approaching and I studied hours every night preparing for it. After taking the AP Exam in May, I felt very confident that I would get a 4 or 5 despite the difficulty of the course.

It is now the end of my junior year, and I have taken the AP exam and survived the class. I felt that the fact that I received a 4 is a great achievement because I was scared of the AP class. However, at the end, all the hard work and determination paid off. Taking the AP class was not as bad as I thought. Even though it was hard to take along with my other honors classes, I managed to get high grades. My study habits have changed, and I overcame my fear of taking an AP class. I feel that it was the right decision for me to take the AP class.
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<p>No offense, but I would NEVER write that for one of my common app essays. Never talk about high school academia. It’s a personal statement. They want it to be personal. Your essay is just the typical “oh I was dubious with this class etc etc, but all worked out. oh I learned to prioritize and gain adept time management skills blah blah blah”.</p>

<p>Scratch it all out.</p>

<p>^ I second that. This essay clearly wouldn’t work.</p>

<p>What schools are you applying to? If you’re looking at Top 30 and above, an essay of this caliber will just break your application. Go around for some essay advices already posted in this forum.</p>