Some help formulating a thesis?

College Essays
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<p>The prompt is about overcoming obstacles in your personal life.</p>

<p>I'm having a hard time writing a thesis.
I want it to be visual, but I can't seem to format it.</p>

<p>So...</p>

<p>I want to depict a girl, standing in the eye of a hurricane. </p>

<p>The hurricane represents the adversity surrounding her; divorced parents and being shuffled between them, their battle for her affection, etc. The eye represents her standpoint; she is so floored by everything around her that she distances herself from it, essentially taking a subordinate role in her own life. She eventually becomes dismantled by the gusts of the storm, and after it has passed, she alone is left to pick up the pieces. </p>

<p>Also, should the passage of the storm represent her arduous struggle to withstand it? This would be followed by the reclamation of herself (through the broken pieces), and her use of past adversity as a foundation for a strong, thriving virtue.</p>

<p>Thank you SO much to anybody who can help me format this thing. It would mean the world. I have been up all night, and I'm still staring at a blank document.</p>

<p>I just don't know how to get the gist into a bold, captivating thesis.</p>

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<p>“I’ve weathered storms before, but this is my Katrina.”</p>

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<p>This is a very interesting, clever idea for an essay, but I’m not sure how feasible it all is. GL~!</p>

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<p>So should I just kick the idea and go for a more conservative approach?</p>

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<p>i think you’d have to be really abstract to write this within a standard word count (300?)</p>

<p>if you wrote allegorically, some admissions people wouldn’t understand what you were saying. if you want to create this symbol (which i think is phenomenal) you have to make sure that it is completely clear what everything represents, even if it ruins the abstract feeling of the essay.</p>

<p>just my two cents. personally, when i get to essays next year, im probably just going to write basic, honest, human prose because its easiest for me to be clear in. i cant assume that the admissions people are descendants of Shakespeare.</p>

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<p>It sounds pretty good and visual (imho) as it is already. Could you write a draft, just put down whatever comes to mind, and then look at it after a break of a few hours?</p>