Somebody please critique my essay!!!

[Botsboy111]

<p>Hi, just post here and I will PM you. Please, I need some help, any last minute advice!!!!</p>

[cutxpaste]

<p>i will, pm</p>

[enzo3366]

<p>ill read it</p>

[harry7]

<p>I will do it.. pm me.</p>

[smokeylarue]

<p>I'll take a look</p>

[tufnut2crack]

<p>I'll read, pm</p>