Someone critique my uc prompt1

<p>hey can anyone please critique (honestly and harshly)/give suggestions for my uc prompt 1.
Its a short read (250 words) thats interesting enough to look over</p>

<p>heyy. i need desperate help. I can critique yours right now if you can critique mine. Mine is on uc prompt 1 too. I can send you mine first if you want</p>