Someone please critique my UT Austin personal statement, deadline Wednesday!

<p>I'm a transfer student, so keep that in mind. Would anyone be willing to critique my essay? I tried to write it as sincere as possible, but I'm wondering if it came off just a little bit preachy?</p>

<p>Sure, I can take a look at it. Just send me a private message. </p>

<p>I will, if you would like. Send me a message</p>

<p>Also, it’s around 1000 words, so…</p>

<p>Please, anyone?</p>