Someone please edit my college essay

<p>The question is Consider something in your life you think goes unnoticed and write about why it's important to you! Heres my essay...let me know and thanks in advance for your critiques </p>

<pre><code>In this day and age where phones and electronics are everywhere its hard to just get away. My phone is constantly ringing with emails, text messages, or phone calls consuming my time.Life is hectic being filled with sports, dates, and school.. Its hard enough to find places to do uninterrupted homework let alone time. Now, i’m not saying its a bad thing to engage in these activities but often times they lead to unneeded stress and poor performance. I like to make a point weekly if not daily to try and get away from the unnecessary materialistic objects and noise in my life. This is not a noticed tactic by really anyone but it’s importance to me is surreal. Without these little breaks; the stress of everyday school, track, and relationships could start to take a toll on those things, the things most important to me. The mental stress can start to make me weary and it’s not a secret that you don’t perform as well when you don’t obtain enough sleep. This may lead to worse grades in the classroom for me, worse times on the track, and unhealthy relationships because i’m simply exhausted. Besides that its important to me, its nice to get away from the emotional and physical stressors of everyday life.
Without being able to just lay down and think it or do some homework in a quiet room it would be much tougher for me to perform at a high level. I take pride in everything I do and to do that I need to get away. It’s like a mini-vacation where i can sort things out and figure out how i’m going to tackle a situation. Not being bothered by sometimes meaningless texts or phone calls is a lost art of my generation. Its so easy to become distracted by my phone or other electronics during homework. These distractions cause a loss of focus and frustration due to the amount of time the work is taking; inevitably underperformance will follow. This is why I take my “mini vacations” from my phone and life in general to just relax or get some homework done uninterrupted. Its important to me to maintain healthy relationships, do well in my sports, and most importantly to do well in school and to do that I need some unnoticed get aways.
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<p>What school is this essay for?</p>

<p>Madison but I revised it a ton and finished it. Thank though</p>