Someone please help me with appeal letter to dismiss me

College Essays
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I just transferred and have servere ADHD and after medication mix up and being 100+ miles away I literally couldn’t retain material this semester. I took classes the school set me up with and it was a lot harder classes than freshman in my major had to do. It was just really difficult and two of my classes required at least 8 hours a week minimum and I was drowning. Anyway, please let me know how this is and what to fix! There’s a guy online that if you pay 95 he will give you feed back and I might do that. Any input is appreciated!

To Whom It May Concern,
I am writing to appeal my dismissal from __. I was extremely distraught when I received the news about my dismissal from college. I would hope you would reinstate me from the college.
Transferring last semester was definitely more than I bargained for, the move I had been anticipating my whole high school career as well as fall semester; was not as smooth as I had been anticipating. Most of this being due to the fact my medication to help make the symptoms of my chronic disease manageable had not been working as efficiently as it used to. I have been on medication to treat my ADHD since fifth grade and it has made my ability to focus and retain information a lot easier for me. As time has gone and i’ve grown physically I could feel the effects lessen and lessen. Once I got to _ I took on classes that I thought I would be able to handle and the fear of falling behind other freshman in my major because I did not start at __ in the fall, I stayed in the difficult classes. As time went on I would find it harder to focus and making it difficult to meet deadlines without doing it all at once. Expressing my concern to my doctor during spring break she put me on another medication with the one I was already on. The symptoms were too strong and caused me to not sleep, eat, and gave me shakes. While it did help with school it was causing a lot of emotional issues that it was decided I should not take it anymore. Being unable to go home meet with my doctor the remainder of the time spent at ___ I tried my hardest but it was extremely difficult to do what I am capable of without the help I need.
While what happened with my disease was out of my control there could of been more for me to do. I should’ve talked to my teachers about it or even someone at the school. I was too scared of looking like I was asking for sympathy when in reality I was hurting myself more. If I was allowed back to ___ I would ask for more help as well as taking advantage of the CADE tutoring you provide. I am aware of my GPA and the improvement it needs, I have already signed up for four summer classes at __ and I am willing to take as many credits as I need in order to make my GPA one that affects my drive and love for ___ and learning. I have already changed my medication and having more frequent visits with my doctor to make adjustments to it if I need it, I also prepared a schedule that worked for me, and I plan on taking advantage of every service ___ has to offer.
___ has been my dream since middle school and being here is not something I would ever take for granted, being able to get an education in an institution like __ is a privilege that not everyone gets. I understand that this is my first semester here but please understand that doesn’t accurately represent reflect my love for school and ___

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Cut it dramatically. Use paragraphs. Focus on how you’re going to improve should you be granted the opportunity to continue. Be humble. Something like this

I am writing to appeal my dismissal from ___.

Transferring last semester proved to be a harder transition than I had anticipated. Most of my difficulties were due to my medication for ADHD, which I’ve taken since fifth grade, but which has now become less effective. It became harder to focus to meet my deadlines.

I addressed these difficulties with my doctor during spring break, and she prescribed additional medication, which turned out to be too strong. It caused me to be unable to sleep, eat, and it gave me shakes. While it did help with school, the new medication caused emotional stress, and I stopped taking it. I was unable to go home meet with my doctor during the remainder of the time spent at ___ . I tried my hardest to perform in my classes, but it was extremely difficult without the help I needed.

I know I should’ve talked to my teachers about it, or even someone at the school. I was too scared of looking like I was asking for sympathy. I know this was a mistake. I also know it was a mistake to not seek medical help sooner.

Recently, I changed my medication and feel better. I plan on frequent visits with my doctor to make adjustments if necessary. I believe this is an important step that will help me succeed at ____ if I’m readmitted.

I also plan on taking advantage of CADE tutoring, reaching out to my professors more, and turning for help as soon as I need it.

I am committed to improving my academic performance, and I hope you allow me a second chance at _____. With my new medication and a stronger resolve, I believe I can succeed here.

_____been my dream since middle school and I realize studying here is a privilege. I would be extremely grateful if I could prove to you I’m worthy of it.

Sincerely,

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^ Excellent suggestions. Just saved the OP $95!

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Great revisions of the letter. My only comment is that the shorter (and shorter is much better) version doesn’t mention the signing up for four summer classes.

First off, @missmewiththat , are you sure you can handle four summer classes? It would really hurt your case if you don’t succeed in all the classes you take this summer, but it would not be considered negatively if you changed the number of classes before (and not after!) they start. Something to think about.

I would consider something like: “I have already signed up for __ summer classes at __. I consider these classes an opportunity for me to prove that, with my medical condition under control, I am capable of doing the work necessary to succeed at .”

Good luck!

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Yes the classes are spread apart by 2 sessions

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@katliamom Great rewrite. Agree it could be cut further. But very generous time spent on a substantial and well-reasoned improvement.

To the OP, I find institutions rarely change their minds. Don’t spend much time or stress on your appeal, unless they offer further dialogue.

Your time otherwise is better spent crafting your Plan B. Perhaps matriculating slowly at a local state college and being sure to make it onto the Dean’s List. From that, you can focus on grad school or transferring.

I know what I’m talking about. Don’t worry. A life can have many chapters, just don’t waste time.

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On rereading, the second paragraph of the revised letter could be cut entirely. (The one beginning “I addressed.”