Someone please read my common app essay?

<p>Hello! I finished my personal essay for common app, but I need someone to read it and give any comments or advice. And the length is over the limit. I really need help, if someone would be nice enough to help me, I would greatly appreciate it!
The prompt is : Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.</p>

<p>Please, please, please!!!! I really need help! Thank you so much!</p>

<p>Sure, you can PM it to me if you don’t mind swapping as i need mine revised as well!</p>

<p>Pm me </p>