Someone read my essay please?

<p>I've been told that my essay really isn't good enough for top schools... Can some people read it and give suggestions as to how to improve? I don't think I put enough of my personality into the essay and made it unique.</p>

<p>Id be glad to read it over</p>

<p>ill take a look. pm me</p>

<p>Sure. PM me.</p>