<p>I've been told it sounds too narrative to constitute as a college app-type essay, and I want to be able to fix that. Can someone check out my rough draft I have so far via PM? :)</p>
<p>I will do it</p>
<p>i can look it over if you want! just PM it to me.</p>
<p>hey I’m willing to read your essay as long as you’re okay with slightly blunt advice haha</p>
<p>Bump, new essay. Care to read?</p>
<p>Sure i’ll look over it!</p>
<p>I’ll have a look!</p>
<p>Sure, pm me.</p>