Someone want to tool on my rough draft?

College Essays
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<p>I just wrote this, and I want people to go house on it. I feel like it's too long and needs to be cut down. Anyone?</p>

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<p>Preferably someone in college, I just want someone to critique the living daylights out of this one. Common App, by the way.</p>

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<p>PM me ill critique</p>

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<p>PM me, i'd like to read :]</p>

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<p>Why, thank you!</p>

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<p>Yeah, feel free to PM it. I'll try to tear it apart.</p>

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<p>Thank you! Um, asc3nd, have you gotten to it? No response yet...</p>

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<p>Well, anyone else?</p>

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<p>Sure I'll <em>tool</em> on your rough draft, PM please :)</p>

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<p>lolz tool ok PM it</p>

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<p>thank you!</p>

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<p>I haven't recieved any response, other than noiseofyears.</p>

<p>hoping i wasn't screwed over...</p>

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<p>i'll read :)</p>

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<p>thank you!</p>

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<p>pm it overrr ill help as much as i can</p>

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<p>if you want I can read it.</p>

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<p>sure, i'll try my best to help :)</p>