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<p>I wasn't sure about my Stanford "write a letter to your roommate" essay or the "intellectual experience" essay, and I'd be really grateful if someone could review it and let me know what they thought. Thank you!</p>

<p>Here's the roommate essay: </p>

<p>Dear Roommate,
I’m so excited to meet you! I’m sure we’ll be able to get along and learn a lot about each other during our time as roommates.
One of the main things you should know about me is that I’m open to pretty much everything – my interests change on an almost daily basis. Sometimes I’ll spend the whole day listening to obscure indie music, sometimes I like to sing along (very badly) with Taylor Swift. One day I’ll stay out late with friends, while the next you might find me lying in bed, drinking tea and watching Doctor Who (yes, I’m a bit of a nerd as well). Whether you like action movies or romantic comedies, going out and meeting new people or staying in, watching late-night TV or going running at 6 am, I’m always be willing to try it out – well, I might have issues with the 6 am part.
I feel like I should warn you that I’m not the neatest or most organized person. Between the clothes dumped on my floor and the books piled next to my bed, my room can sometimes be hard to navigate. If you like staying organized, though, I can promise that I will try to do the same.
Like I mentioned above, I love trying new things. I hope you do too, because it means that living together will lead to new experiences for both of us. I’m looking forward to the day we move in together and begin our first year at Stanford!</p>

<p>I tried to be more casual and show more of my personal voice, but now I feel like it sounds a bit generic. Thoughts?</p>

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<p>anyone can read my essay?</p>

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<p>it’s probably your honest voice - which is good - but does come across as a bit generic</p>

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<p>I agree. It’s well-written but almost anyone could have wrote it. Try to focus more on what makes you special.</p>