Hey Guys,
So I am writing a wait list letter to Stevens Institution to show that Stevens remain my #1 choice and I am struggling picking some good adjectives for my closing paragraph.
For example:
“Stevens is a wonderful school” I thought of replacing wonderful with enlightening, but does it sounds weird?
“My energetic personality and willingness to learn will be an (exemplary, exquisite, or exceptional) fit at Stevens.”
If anyone has time, I would really appreciate it if you guys can look through my essay. I really want to attend Stevens and this essay is really my last chance to increase my chances of getting out of wait list and get accepted.
Thanks a lot!!
You don’t want to sound like you went to thesauruse.com and replaced a bunch of small words with big words. “Stevens is a wonderful school” sucks, don’t use that sentence. Don’t tell the school they’re wonderful, show them you think they are amazing without actually saying those words. I heard that somewhere and I agree, lots of people call their school, “wonderful” and you’re best bet would be to say something else. That sentence is lazy.
The second one, go “exceptional”. Again, thesaurus.
I really hope that helps!
Why write an essay? They won’t read a long flowery essay about how great they are and you are anyway. The best thing that can get you in is to say you are still really interested, let them know if you have any new EC accomplishments, and if it is your first choice school, say so.
I would just basically make it factual for exactly why you believe Stevens would be a great school. Show them why they should accept you and tell them if you will attend if taken off the waitlist.
Thx for everyone’s suggestion and yea I did talked about my new accomplishment since December and how I am interested and if i am accepted, I will enroll, etc. This is just for my closing paragraph to restate what I thought of Stevens and that I am very interested so yea lol
My suggestion is to show that you understand what the school has to offer. Name specific programs, courses, or extracurriculars. Say something about the student culture. If you know of a particular professor, name him or her. Then connect whatever you wrote to specifics in both your background and your goals. The result will be that Stevens can believe that you took the time to understand who they are, to look at yourself, and to make the match. Hope that helps.