Supplement Essay

<p>Hello, I have applied to a couple of Ivy League universities (I know it's a stretch but I like to reach for the stars). While I am inclined to Brown University (it's my first choice), I do really like the other Ivies I applied to. I submitted all of my applications and supplements over the weekend but I was wondering if anybody could give me their opinion on my Cornell Supplement essay (as shown below)? </p>

<p>College of Arts and Sciences:
Describe your intellectual interests, their evolution, and what makes them exciting to you. Tell us how you will utilize the academic programs in the College of Arts and Sciences to further explore your interests, intended major, or field of study.</p>

<pre><code> As I have done so many times before, I sat on the front steps of my house and gazed at the mosaic of colors visible during a sunset. As the date of my graduation approaches, I have become increasingly nostalgic. I sometimes wonder to myself, “How did I get to this point?” As I stared at the setting sun, I had a flashback to where my dreams originated.
My aspirational evolution began when I was six years old. At this age, I believed I could be an artist. In the first grade, I thought that my drawings of houses and stick figures were masterpieces. Looking back, I think that I must have been out of my mind since I know I have no artistic ability whatsoever. From there, my goals shifted to accounting. At seven years old, I was in love with math; accounting seemed like the perfect fit for the “human calculator” (my nickname in elementary school). Nevertheless, that too fell to the wayside. It was not until the next year that the field of medicine first entered my mind. A check-up at Tenafly Pediatrics led to my first crystallizing moment. At eight years old, I knew I wanted to be a doctor. I loved the mystery of the medical field. I have always pictured doctors as scientific detectives. What intrigues me is that they have to utilize the symptoms to diagnose or “uncover” what is ailing a patient.
While my career paths have varied greatly, there have always been two unceasing passions: mathematics and science. Math is distinctive because calculations have a definitive answer or set of answers. For instance, if I was solving a quadratic equation, I know that I would need to find two answers. I love utilizing math outside of the classroom. (e.g. my mother refers to me as the “tip calculator”). The fact that math is so straightforward is why it persists as one of my favorite subjects.
On the other hand, I have also been fascinated by the sciences. I view the various fields of science as different “cases”. As the “investigator”, I have the task of viewing how scientific processes take place. For instance, in my sophomore chemistry class, our class performed an experiment involving flames. We used different compounds to see how the flames would react. What transpired left me awestruck. It turns out that certain chemicals caused the flames to change to a certain color (i.e. copper chloride turned the fire blue).
Although I may be “undecided” at the moment, I know Cornell offers an abundance of majors. While I am leaning towards the biological sciences, I could decide to take a completely different route. Cornell also offers a plethora of international programs such as Cornell Abroad and the South Asia Program that would enable me to learn a great deal about new cultures. Lastly, I am confident that the prestigious professors at this institution will be instrumental in my achieving a successful future as a physician.
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<p>Also I want to point out I did indent this essay (5 paragraphs) when I sent it</p>

<p>If they google your essay, they’ll see Brown is your first choice. Bad idea.</p>

<p>The essay is nice, kinda sweet. I like it.</p>

<p>Thank you so much! Also, it is okay if they google it. Yes I love Brown and it is my first choice but I really like Cornell too and If i was accepted I would be very excited as well because it is a wonderful institution and they have a lot to offer!</p>

<p>I would take down this post. It’s a poor idea to post something like this on the internet and with Google, it’s quite possible someone will copy/paste your essay. Guess what happens if Cornell or Brown admissions sees duplicate essays? Neither you nor the cheater will get in.</p>

<p>oh okay i just wanted to get an opinion on the essay how would i take it down?</p>

<p>Unfortunately I think CC only lets you take down a post within a certain time period after posting. I wouldn’t worry about someone using your essay though because Cornell’s deadline has already passed.</p>

<p>oh okay thanks by the way what do you think of the essay?</p>

<p>I thought it was pretty good. I also applied to Cornell and finished my application a couple of days ago and followed a similar format of mainly talking about myself for about 4/5ths of it and then talking about how Cornell could continue my aspirations to be a physician. Hopefully, all goes well for the both of us!</p>

<p>Thank you and yes I wish us both the best of luck!</p>

<p>I think it is also great because we both want to be doctors lol anyone else have an opinion about the essay?</p>