syracuse uni supplement? read? edit? suggestions? plz?

<p>will anyone please read, edit or give me suggestion on my Syracuse supplement questions? Thanks! It's GREATLY appreciated!
here are the questions:
1. Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?
2. If you have had paid work experience, what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?
3. Our mission of Scholarship in Action extends beyond the classroom to include engagement opportunities with our campus community, the City of Syracuse, and locations across the globe. Based on your academic interests, tell us what real world experiences you might pursue during your education at Syracuse University as part of this mission.</p>

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<li> Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?
The basic of a good college is one that nurtures book knowledge, intellectual curiosity, and social diversity. However, to make an excellent college, the college must be able to reach beyond its boundaries. During my search for this excellent college, I came across Syracuse. Through the information from my guidance counselor and Syracuse’s website, I learned about Syracuse’s myriad of departments and programs and, most of all, Syracuse’s vision. Growing up in Chinese culture, I was taught to reach out to those around me through knowledge and experience because as my father said, “there is no use in learning if it’s not used for the larger community.” As I did more research on Syracuse, I finally discovered the perfect fit for me. Driven by Scholarship in Action, Syracuse is committed to promoting social good through its intellectual capacity. Syracuse and I share the same motivation. Through attending private elementary schools and private high schools in New York City my whole life, I’ve acquired unique knowledge in the great facilities and classes offered. The variety of classes offered nurtured my interest in the arts and math. Not only were these schools gifted with devoted teachers, but also devoted students. Because of these, my knowledge increased within an environment that is both competitive and supportive. At the same time, my identity was shaped by these environments. As I interacted with students and teachers and learned about their own cultures and interests, I also discovered the beauty and richness of my own culture. Similar to these excellent private schools, Syracuse offers a great learning environment. Using the knowledge and ideas developed and gained from my experiences at the previous schools, I will contribute to fulfilling Syracuse’s vision. At the same time, Syracuse’s commitment and variety of departments will nurture my passion in promoting the wellness of communities. Furthermore, the uniqueness of my Chinese culture incorporated in the mix of New Yorkers’ cultures will enrich Syracuse’s diversity. Not only will it educate me, but my knowledge gained from my experience at Syracuse will allow me to contribute to the improvement of the larger community in the future.</li>
<li>If you have had paid work experience, what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?</li>
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<p>Over the past four years at high school, I’ve never had any paid work experience. Mostly, my free time was spent volunteering and reaching out to the larger community. At one of the volunteering agencies, Dorot, I visited homebound senior citizens. From giving friendly visits to birthday visits, each trip enriched me with new perspectives on life. I found myself dealing with genial, funny men and women with great stories to tell. Whether these stories were filled with tears or laughter, each story taught its unique lesson. One seniors, Gilbert, taught me a valuable lesson. His passion for dancing during WWII motivated him to dance for me even though his legs were slightly disabled. As he told stories of his experience at the theater, his experience at WWII began to emerge. His lively movements transformed into heartfelt facial expressions within minutes. Accounts of his parents and siblings taken away one by one, and the horrific conditions forced upon them shocked me. At that moment, I realized how fortunate I was to have my family with me, to have a home, food, and shelter. Although what I learned was not academic knowledge, I’m grateful to have this heart changing experience. I’ve learned to appreciate what I normally take for granted. I believe that by using my educational experience, I will help those who are less fortunate, who don’t have the basic necessities to fulfill life.
3. Our mission of Scholarship in Action extends beyond the classroom to include engagement opportunities with our campus community, the City of Syracuse, and locations across the globe. Based on your academic interests, tell us what real world experiences you might pursue during your education at Syracuse University as part of this mission.
I believe that psychology is the key to understanding many issues of the world. Because of the improper environment some children are brought up in (for example: abusive parents, alcoholic siblings, friends who have a bad influence, distant, uncaring family members, etc.), many grow up thinking some immoral actions are right or justified for specific reasons. Because of this, a majority of criminals have developed in society. In addition, many issues arise from differences in thoughts, traditions, and cultures. Through studying psychology and sociology at Syracuse I will develop a great understanding of these issues. By promoting public awareness at Syracuse and at the larger community of these underlying issues, we can all work together to improve the community as a whole.
At one of the volunteering agencies, Dorot, I visited homebound senior citizens. From giving friendly visits to birthday visits, each trip enriched me with new perspectives on life. I found myself dealing with genial, funny men and women with great stories to tell. Whether these stories were filled with tears or laughter, each story taught its unique lesson. One seniors, Gilbert, taught me a valuable lesson. His passion for dancing during WWII motivated him to dance for me even though his legs were slightly disabled. As he told stories of his experience at the theater, his experience at WWII began to emerge. His lively movements transformed into heartfelt facial expressions within minutes. Accounts of his parents and siblings taken away one by one, and the horrific conditions forced upon them shocked me. At that moment, I realized how fortunate I was to have my family with me, to have a home, food, and shelter. Although what I learned was not academic knowledge, I’m grateful to have this heart changing experience. I’ve learned to appreciate what I normally take for granted. I believe that by using my educational experience, I will help those who are less fortunate, who don’t have the basic necessities of life.</p>

<p>did u have to write that much for a single question? or you wanted to?
Im applying transfer for SU this year too. But my answers weren’t as long as yours</p>

<p>did you get in btw?</p>

<p>Have you check the word or character limit of these short answers? Can you tell me what they are? We have a storm in NY so I might be able to provide you with comment tomorrow through PM if let me know the word limit, but you must have 15 posts to do PM (private message).</p>