<p>I have a dog. She likes to play with a ball and I like soccer. She sniffs for food and I can detect the wonderful aroma of a cheese pizza from miles away. She woofs for fun and I like to sing in the bathroom. She jumps excitedly when she meets new people and I am very outgoing. She chews my pencils sometimes and I write a lot. She is slightly fat yet still manages to run like a rocket. Thats physics and I love physics. I guess I love dogs too then, for I am a lot like one.</p>
<p>The pencil sentence isn’t logically parallel with the other sentences. And what exactly are you saying is physics? The relationship between you and your dog? Just the dog? The rocket? And you give two reasons for you loving dogs: because you love physics, and because you are a lot like a dog - both of which, I don’t really get. Sorry if I’m coming off as rude, but I’m not completely sure what this essay is about exactly.</p>
<p>I am perplexed. What point are you trying to convey?</p>
<p>Your essay is very different and makes one keep wondering as to why you are comparing yourself to your dog while keeping the reader engaged.</p>
<p>I am no english master, but should there be commas before most of those uses of “and”?</p>
<p>haah yeah you need commas! #800 sat writing</p>
<p>actually, commas aren’t necessary when there are only two clauses in each sentence</p>
<p>Dis ishh dank</p>