<p>I found these posts in the Transfer 101 thread. They should help you out.</p>
<p>"I’ll go over a few things that worked for me with the essays.</p>
<p>The first is: try to be as specific as possible on the “why transfer” question. If you can, tailor each essay to the individual schools you are applying to. However, this is incredibly time-consuming (particularly so if you, like I did, are writing these essays during the school year and have to deal with actual coursework). So where I could I reused. My Harvard and Yale essays sounded very specific to each college, but in reality they were nearly identical with minor modifications (e.g. discussing briefly Yale’s residential college system).</p>
<p>My second tip would be: don’t be negative! When I first started writing my essays, I got caught up in the negativity I felt toward my old school. My “why transfer to Y” essay became “why I wanted to desperately get out of X”. I think students who do this shoot themselves in the foot. At the same time, if there is a serious issue with your current institution, don’t be afraid to mention it! The best way to reconcile this is to mention the problem, but instead of focusing on it, use it as a launch-pad to get into why school Y is great for you. For example, one of the biggest problems I had was with class size. Instead of harping on how crowded X was, I used it as a means to talk about school Y’s intimate size + res. college system.</p>
<p>My third piece of advice is to make it personal. While this sort of falls under my first suggestion… I don’t think specific automatically assumes personal. I could say college Y is great for a,b, and c without making any mention of how it is important to me. So what if Y has an intimate class size and an awesome college system? What does that do for you, your goals, and the growth you hope to achieve during your 4 year tenure?</p>
<p>This last one is pretty obvious, but… make sure it’s well-written. You can have all the great reasons in the world but if it’s not articulated well it doesn’t mean jack. Get help with your writing if you don’t think it’s up to par. Have peers and parents look over your essays… get their input. It’s often hard to objectively judge the quality of your own essay, and they can provide useful insight."</p>
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<p>7) Write stellar “Why X school?” essays. This one seems obvious but there are tons of students who simply don’t put the time in, or worse yet, copy paste their “Why Cornell?” essay and use it for Brown by switching the name. Don’t do this! Research the school. Talk about specific programs. Admissions spends all day reading “Why X” essays. The last thing you want to do is give them another “Penn is an ivy-league school. I want to go to an ivy-league school” essay. Say they read that essay and then yours, where you list in great detail, just why you want to attend Penn. Something like:</p>
<p>-top notch research facilities (best in the ivies)
-competitive track team
-submatriculation program (can get b.a. and m.a. in four years)
-dual-degree program (can get b.a. from school of arts and sciences in addition to b.s. from wharton)
-philly=most livable city in america
etc…</p>
<p>You need concrete researched reasons for wanting to attend. After all, if you don’t have those, why are you applying? Frankly, that’s exactly what the admissions committee will think if you submit a generic essay. </p>
<p>8) Proofread! Not doing so, in addition to being unprofessional, shows a serious lack of interest in a school, like saying, “I don’t care enough about this school to properly edit my essay for them.” Penn’s website explicitly says “Proofread your essays. No really. Seriously.” That was their admissions tip of the week today and I’m sure that applies across the board for other competitive schools.</p>