<p>Hope you guys liked my hook, and these aren't the best, but I had to beat out my competing writing question threads!</p>
<p>When recipes for iced tea appeared in a few late-nineteenth-century cookbooks, the drink did not become popular until the 1904 World's Fair.</p>
<p>"Appeared in" and "a few" are separately underlined.</p>
<p>I believe "when" should be changed to "while?"</p>
<p>When should be changed to "Though" or "Although".</p>
<p>^Ahhh I can't believe I didn't notice that haha. Thanks a lot!</p>
<p>yep, i agree, either "while" or "though" or "although" etc</p>
<p>i think this was from one of the early 06 QAS's , and i remember getting it right cuz the context is wrong =D</p>
<p>^2008 Ren. Furthermore, why can't I sleep?</p>
<p>O.o? thinking too much?</p>
<p>^Maybe.haha</p>
<p>When should be changed to Although.</p>
<p>Yeah even though or although would work.</p>
<p>Explanation: read the first part and the second part os this sentence independently from one another. They contradict, they're in opposition. Therefore, you need a word that draws a distinction between the two. "When" doesn't do the job.</p>