<p>Tizil, I loved your essay. I’ll give you a detailed review later on FB, but what I think ‘unsafe’ means is that if adcoms google your essay, they’ll find this. Although the date is later than the deadline, you haven’t mentioned your identity here. So they don’t know who originally wrote this, and thus plagiarism can be considered. I think that we should include our names with the essay, so that a google search can tell that we are the original authors.</p>
<p>Tizil, I thoroughly enjoyed reading your essay. Great job!</p>
<p>I was just alerting you guys to the fact that people from admissions come here and get to read all the comments we post and the mistakes we highlight. That’s all. Tizil, you have nothing to worry and I am sure you knew that. :)</p>
<p>Tizil great job.
My comments are in your FB inbox. U’ll be shocked to see what I write in your Inbox.</p>
<p>That was a great essay Tizil! 
I loved how you took a routine topic and reinvented how you wrote it! 
Theres really nothing else for me to say 
<em>buggy eye smiley</em></p>
<p>Hi from Bangladeshi thread. </p>
<p>Tizil I loved your essay. You have taken a great risk by ditching the traditional path of college essay writing. I hope the adcomms like it as well ;)</p>
<p>Thanks Karan, Chubby and Undergrad
Plus, Karan … I have had a long history with the pseudonym ‘Tizil’. Also, the essay is posted on a later date. (I submitted the common app on the 15th). Let them find it, I put it up strictly for educational purposes so that others can get an idea from it, and perhaps it may help them. I did it because when I originally took to the internet to find an idea, I couldn’t find anything useful.</p>
<p>Almost all of you have already read this, but I agree with Tizil about the help part. So here it is-</p>
<p>(It’s not broken into paragraphs on the CA, I have just done it here to make it easy to read)</p>
<p>The Squirrel and the Spider</p>
<p>A squirrel pokes out of my pocket and whispers the ideal gas equation in my ear. Stunned, I jolt open my eyes and see her disappear down the trunk. Why are squirrels talking chemistry? And where am I? Utterly flabbergasted about the former, I lay my head back and take a cursory look around to answer the latter; that I am propped up on a branch of the neighbourhood Banyan tree. As I run my hand along the familiar nooks and crannies of the bark, my many encounters with the tree flash in my mind. </p>
<p>They realize me of the deep bond I share with this woody giant. We are old mates and I still climb it every other day to find some moments of solace, silence and self-analysis. I spend my time up here playing philosopher, thinking about my classes, my school, my friends, my relationships, my life and the world around me. It offers me a pause button, a chance to leisurely ponder and delve deeper into the rushing realities of the ground below. </p>
<p>Often, my thoughts offer new insight into special relativity or Lewis Carroll while I enjoy the shade and the sound of the leaves whispering in the breeze. But today is somewhat different, for today a squirrel has whispered too. My curiosity unquenched and the voice of that squirrel still echoing in my ears, I get up and start scaling another branch, hoping to find other talking animals. And as soon as I pull myself up it, lo and behold, I chance upon an intelligent little spider. </p>
<p>Instantly we fall into conversation and he begins describing me his technique to spin differential equations, something he does better than he spins his silk. But why do you need calculus? I ask him. To make flies step into my parlour, of course pat comes his reply. Thoroughly impressed, I chat with him some more about the integration of trigonometric functions, all the while slowly realizing whats happening around me. </p>
<p>The millions of times I have gripped and grappled the handholds and footholds of this brown trunk have somehow made nature talk back, literally. Why now and for what? I dont know but I am not bothered; for her very act of replying makes my heart skip a beat. My favourite tree, my friend of long just got better. Delighted in this realization, I start thinking of the implications todays events will have on my relationship with nature; the way shell complete me. </p>
<p>But my thought process is interrupted by a sudden harsh cacophony. And as it reaches its crescendo, my memory hits me like splash of icy water. The noise dies down and I remember that I had dozed off. While blinking my eyes to clear my head, I flail around looking for my spider and my squirrel, but in vain. The tree has gone silent, the animals have turned mute. So was it all just a dream? </p>
<p>Of course, I curse my naivety for believing it to be real. I should have known, after all where else do animals talk but in dreams? As if to answer both questions, my hand unconsciously slips into my pocket and takes out an acorn with squirrel bite marks on it. No, it wasnt…They talk on my tree, I say to myself, smiling inwardly at the mysteries of nature that still elude me.</p>
<p>Thanks again Cobalt and Darthspawns :)</p>
<p>And Karan, your essay is much better than what I had read before! :D</p>
<p>great essays Tizil and Karan. I like the originality of your formatting Tizil (on top of the content itself of course)</p>
<p>Nice essay.
But I would say this lacks one thing.
See if someone steals tizil’s essay no one can use them cuz no one else has written a book.
While in ur case it could happen.</p>
<p>Thanks Alea And USApplicant ^_^</p>
<p>I am glad that I am getting such positive response! Hopefully, the ad coms will see it in the same spirit :)</p>
<p>^It probably isn’t good enough for stealing and the deadline for all my colleges has passed. :D</p>
<p>I’m not saying someone will steal it.
I’m saying it lacks specificity.If someone else can write it as well.
I guess I have said enough.</p>
<p>Yeah, well they can. But they can’t submit it. So it’s ok. I appreciate your concern. Thanks</p>
<p>@Tizil7- Great essay btw!
@Karan- I have already read it earlier, but still I really love the visual treat your essay provides with those interludes of imagination of squirrel!</p>
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<p>Tizil, I saw the cover and TOC of *** **** ** ****. Very nicely done.
btw, teacher’s children FTW! </p>
<p>Got to leave now. Will be back in March to see the results of this year’s derby.
All the best!</p>
<p>@Tizil7: Nice essay. Although, imo, the conclusion could have been a bit better. “Make a difference in the world” - a little cliched, no? :)</p>
<p>Thanks Phr34k, Chubby and PD :D</p>
<p>Haha yes, I agree, it is very clich</p>
<p>Karan- much much much better than what I had read too This is awesome
@Tizil- I think the adcoms would HAVE to take it in a good spirit, its too good xD</p>