"this essay is good but you don't talk about yourself enough"

College Essays
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<p>Is anyone else facing this problem?</p>

<p>No matter what I write, peer-editors tell me that it's not revealing enough of my personality. I think that I show my personality through my writing style and my interests, but apparently I haven't been talking about myself enough. </p>

<p>My counterargument is that if I interpret the prompt in a certain way and answer it accordingly, the essay is representative of my personality, if only in the sense that I replied to the question too impersonally. </p>

<p>My parents, for the record, really like these essays, and they know me best. :/</p>

2

<p>Hmm.</p>

<p>You like them.</p>

<p>Your parents like them.</p>

<p>What is the problem?</p>

3

<p>Have you had strangers/people who don't know you too well read it for you? You have to remember that the adcom will be a stranger.</p>

<p>I'll read it for you if you like.</p>