this essay too cliche?

<p>I work at my synogouge as a teachers assistant with 2nd grades in a hebrew school class. i mainly help a few kinds who have minor disabilities but occasionally i sub for high profile autistic kids, etc. WOuld writing an essay about my experiences with the kids and learning about special needs through this program be a good essay or not very stand-outish? </p>

<p>my only other essay i could really write that would make me stand out would be about a disease i contracted in 5th grade that messed up my nervous system (temporarily thank god) giving me balance issues, double vision, buldging eyes etc. would that be better?</p>

<p>or could i tie the two together saying a mix of dealing with kids with disorders and my personal experience together.</p>

<p>Do which ever one you can write a better essay on. Obviously combining your own experiences with disabilities and first hand experience would be ideal, but writing that kind of essay (:read: writing it "good") can be difficult.</p>

<p>im a pretty decent writer. would the mix make for a good essay to admissions officers?</p>

<p>I think it would be. It would show your perspective on both sides of the issue, and how you could sympathize with the kids you were working with, and could understand what they were going through.</p>

<p>the problem with it is that my problem wasa physical problem and didnt last for very long while these kids have more mental (but it can affect physical) issues. could i just discuss the understanding of nto being able to control one's body in general, be it physically or mentally?</p>

<p>tie in your problem with you teaching the kids. Start off your essay with how you suffered, and then lead it to how it inspired you to help out others who suffer through similar problems.</p>