<p>so i let my parents read my essay and they think its not that great.</p>
<p>i started out the essay talking about how one day my grandmother was teaching me how to make dumplings and even though i didnt get it right the first time, second time, or the next few times..I didnt give up and I finally made a perfect dumpling lol
then i go and connect that persistence to a bunch of other stuff I do in my life....solving math problems, etc</p>
<p>is this a strong enough essay to show my persistence? is the topic good? judging by the little info :/
thank you!</p>
<p>the beginning is interesting nd does show persistence, but if your connecting the persistence to solving math problems, doesn’t quite cut it…
Maybe try like something more meaningful in your life or that affected u a lot nd you dint give up…</p>
<p>I think it sounds like a potentially interesting, unique essay topic, but most topics sound great and can be great. What matters is how you execute the topic.</p>
<p>Why did your parents not like it? Was it too disconnected or something?</p>
<p>Try not to make it about math… In my opinion it would be best to make the entire essay about the dumpling incident, describing your feelings, thoughts, things people said in great detail, perhaps sprinkle in other things. Good idea for an essay though, if executed properly (like most topics haha)</p>
<p>^Agreed. Why not keep it about the dumplings? Make it rich, detailed, anecdotal. No need to tell the adcoms that it demonstrates your “persistence” or any other quality–you want to be interesting, not didactic.</p>
<p>To be honest this idea seems kind of generic, like one of the samples that the SAT will publish every year. Unless you can find a more “original” motif other than persistence, I would avoid this essay. It has more potential to go badly than well.</p>
<p>I agree with Sterelus. The idea doesn’t sound unique. There are a lot of “this is a cute analogy or story that explains how I never give up” kinds of essays. Unless you’re a great writer who can provide a fresh take on it (and perhaps you are), I would pick a new topic.</p>