This good enough for an example (essay)

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<p>Most of us are convinced that fame brings happiness. Fame, it seems, is among the things people most desire. We believe that to be famous, for whatever reason, is to prove oneself and confirm that one matters in the world. And yet those who are already famous often complain of the terrible burden of fame. In fact, making the achievement of fame one's life goal involves commitments of time and effort that are usually wasted.</p>

<p>Adapted from Leszek Kolakowski, Freedom, Fame, Lying, and Betrayal: Essays on Everyday Life</p>

<p>Assignment:</p>

<p>Does fame bring happiness, or are people who are not famous more likely to be happy? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. **Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>

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<p>I mentioned how people in pop culture lose individualism because they are forced to appeal to a group and i mentioned how people with fame are heavily ridiculed. I did not mention any names though...</p>

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<p>bump.</p>

<p>Im really worried over this</p>

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<p>honestly bro, it doesn't look good. unless you're positive you developed it enough.</p>

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<p>You'll probably be penalized for not using any specific examples.</p>

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<p>i used both a celebrity example and the great gatsby. For the celebrities, I talked about how their relationships tend to be rather short and then I mentioned how married couples usually name their partner or children as the source of happiness, not money. so I didn't mention any specific celebrities--i really didn't know them--but I feel it was well developed.</p>

<p>the only thing i'm missing from my essay is a conclusion : /</p>

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<p>I used Bill clinton (lol) for one, and i generalized movie stars for the other.</p>

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<p>OMG i talked about Great Gatsy too</p>

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<p>i used great gatsby a lot actually (talked about jay gatsby and daisy buchanan)</p>

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<p>Macbeth- killed to keep fame
King Lear- daughters jealous of fame
Personal example- winning an election caused peers to become overly critical</p>

<p>However, i didnt specifically mention 'Shakespeare' (just the plays in the intro and the characters in the body)</p>

<p>Does this look good?</p>

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<p>ha...I used Bill Clinton too! and I used Harry Potter/Gilderoy Lockhart for my literary supporting evidence</p>

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<p>Eh, unfortunately, HopefulCEO, I don't think what you did will garner you a good (or even average!) essay score. The SAT readers are looking to see that you give strong, convincing evidence to prove your point. If you simply resort to generalities, your argument will necessarily be weak. </p>

<p>I'm sorry, but it doesn't sound like you did "well" on the essay.</p>

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<p>i think you will get an 8 as long as you had 4 paragraphs and good grammar.</p>

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<p>lol i mentioned britney spears</p>

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<p>any opinion on mine please?</p>

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<p>Chinemaya: examples seem apt. If you used them well and wrote well, you should do extremely well on the essay (at least a 10).</p>

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<p>i said fame brings unhappiness. </p>

<p>i talked about peter keating in ayn rand's fountainhead, and how he always strived to be the most popular in his position and be well-liked, but ultimately ended up old and fat, while howard roark worked on his passions and desires, and not based on his social standing, so he won out in the end. ...</p>

<p>i used britney spears...i said that her fame actually had negative effects, b/c if hindered her normal teenager years and turned her childhood at something to be gawked at by the public, and therefore her relationships didnt turn out well, and she's not happy (obviously) and that she ultimately lost much of the fame that originally made her a star. </p>

<p>i was thinking about using willy loman from death of a salesman, but he wasnt exactly famous, he just dreamt about being famous.</p>