This is bugging me..

Applying to College
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<p>Which makes more sense, choice 1 or choice 2:</p>

<p>Choice 1:
I hope that you may consider me for a scholarship or any need based financial aid based on your review of my grades and statistics.
Choice 2:
I hope based on your review of my grades and statistics that you may consider me for a scholarship or any need based financial aid. </p>

<p>This is very important but it's just one of those dilemmas.. thanks lol.</p>

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<p>choice 2, but change 'based' to 'after' and put a comma between hope/between and statistic/that...</p>

<p>"I hope, after on your review of my grades and statistics, that you consider me for a scholarship or need-based financial aid"</p>

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<p>oops: "I hope, after your...."</p>

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<p>I hope, based on your review of my grades and statistics, that you consider me for a scholarship or any need based financial aid.</p>

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<p>Based on your review, I hope that you consider me for a scholarship or for need based financial aid.</p>

<p>-- if you want to include grades, replace statistics with another word.</p>

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<p>this is like SAT writing all over again, and choice E would be like</p>

<p>Hopefully, considering me for a scholarship, any need based financial aid based on your review of my grades.</p>

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<p>maybe you should be like</p>

<p>I hope you consider me for merit or need-based aid upon reviewing my statistics.</p>

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<p>"Please give me scholarship."</p>

<p>straight to the point.</p>

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<p>I'm smart. Give me money.</p>

<p>That works.</p>

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<p>active voice is always better than passive.</p>

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<p>That's a lie.</p>