Thoughts on my UC Personal Statement?

College Essays
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<p>If anyone finds the time, could you give feedback for my personal statement? I'm doing this prompt:</p>

<p>Describe the world you come from — for example, your family, community or school — and tell us how your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations.</p>

<p>Many thanks!</p>

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<p>sure </p>

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<p>sure</p>

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<p>Awesome thanks, I’ll pm to you guys in the morning since I don’t have my laptop with me right now</p>

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<p>You can send it my way too! I had a lot of trouble writing that essay last year, but hopefully I can help!</p>