Too cynical?

College Essays
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<p>Hmm... I was just reading one of those "college essay tip-books" and it listed different dos and don'ts when writing your essay. One of the don'ts was "sounding too cynical". After rereading my essay, I was wondering if I came off too cynical.</p>

<p>Quick explanation:</p>

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<p>I wrote about how much I hated riding the city bus. My main problem with the city bus was the people. I described them (in a not-so-positive) (cynical?) fashion. However, when one of them pays my fare when I forget my money, it changes. They weren't the problem, I was. I realized that I was judging people based only on my outward perceptions, and learn from this. I then end the essay with a transition to a few months later. I'm back on the bus, relating myself to be one of the same people I used to despise. When a woman boards the bus and can't pay her fare, I offer to pay it for her. </p>

<p>The end.</p>

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<p>Does it sound too cynical? I'm afraid that the opening portion where I describe the passengers who ride the bus is a bit too negative.... Maybe the ending makes up for it?</p>

<p>Argh!</p>

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<p>I think that sounds like a great topic! I mean, it might be cynical in the beginning, but the ending definitely doesn't sound too cynical. Wonderful story!</p>

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<p>i vote troll.... kinda unbelievable, if u ask me</p>

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<p>wait... what? what's unbelievable?</p>

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<p>how is this guy a troll?</p>

<p>i personally love cynical essays, and your essay was one of the few i've read on this forum, well, i actually didn't read all of it. it's not that cynical, really. keep it real man. and pm me the full essay, if you can.</p>

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<p>mann, i've seen some trolllllllllllllllllls in my day, UGH :-&lt;/p>

<p>i think this is a great topic essay. :) no worries.</p>