<p>I just finished up my common app essay recently, and although I believe it's decent, I still think that portions of it are tarnished and need more fine-tuning. I'm looking for some highly critical feedback on my essay in order to express my ideas more eloquently. Keep in mind that this is the essay regarding why I wish to transfer which will be given to all schools that I apply to which use the common app, not the more specific supplemental essays. </p>
<p>If you're willing to help, I believe e-mail would be a more efficient means of sending the essay since PMs only allow for a maximum of 5000 characters. However, if the e-mail option is not feasible, I can simply send the essay in two separate PMs.</p>
<p>Thanks in advance.</p>