Transfer Essay... any advice welcome!

<p>Hi if anyone is willing to proofread/ give insight on my first draft of the "why transfer" essay on the CommonApp please message me. I'm not really sure if my essay sounds too generic/ cheesy. Thanks!</p>

<p>Be aware that you will not be able to PM until you have 15 (non-junk) posts.</p>

<p>Oops! Thank you, I didn’t even think about that. :/</p>