<p>i was writing my transfer essay and i came across a problem. i have a bunch of different reasons i want to transfer, but then my essay was scattered and long. should i focus on one or two reaosns or try to fit everything in?
my reasons are:
- not as intellectually stimulating as i want (students are not as motivated or sophisticated as i am used to from my high school)
- huge size is constricting in that i cant get involved and i feel lost
- i was considering being an education major but im not sure yet, here i would have to transfer into the school of education, but it has a ton of requirements and that would limit me, becuase i like other things too. if i transferred into the school of education, i really would only have time for those classes
- distance from home (not as important but still a factor)
- terrible help from advisors (im totally confused for next semester, thank god for my mom) i guess becuase of the size
- i just want a smaller liberal arts college where i feel satisfied after doing well in a class</p>
<p>should i focus one one or two things? should i switch my essay for every school? im a little confused</p>
<p>I'd say focus more on what the college you're applying to has to offer and less on what your current school doesn't have. I'm not saying you were intending to, but if you say bad things about your current college, it may not look too good to admissions people.</p>
<p>For example, instead of saying, "My college isn't very academically stimulating" in your essay, you could say something like, "The high motivation level of students at [insert college name here] combined with their drive to succeed greatly matches what I desire out of a college education."</p>
<p>I think you can condense some of those reasons - eg, want smaller LAC is the umbrella reason wrt huge size and terrible advisors. The reasons that are "not as important" you can probably leave out. </p>
<p>Take a stab at completing your draft, following Alyx' advice to twist it more toward what you are seeking than what is wrong with where you are.</p>
<p>Then look it over and try to condense/reorganize. You can PM me if you would like someone to review and make suggestions ( so long as the deadline is not withn 24 hours ;).</p>
<p>Like Andale and Alyx said, keep it positive.</p>
<p>I made the mistake of being very negative the first time I tried to transfer to a certain school and that it killed my chances. I re-read it after 9 months and realized that I sounded very unsure, whiny, desperate, and like I was simply looking for a way out of situation at the moment. That wasn't the case, but I'm sure that's how I came off. I rewrote it this time around; it sounds much much better now that I focused on the school I wish to transfer to instead of my former situation.</p>
<p>I have a question about the transfer essay... I got waitlisted by the school I am applying to right now... do you guys think it is a good idea to include that in my essay and then talk about how the school is still my "perfect match"?</p>