Transfer Essay - Review

Hello all!

I am a transfer applicant. I am hoping someone can take a look at my common app essay. It’s just the basic “Why do you want to leave, what do you hope to gain by transferring?”
As I am sure many of you understand, we can get a bit desensitized to our own writing, so I think a new set of eyes would be great.
If you have an essay you’d like me to look over, I’d be willing to swap.
Thank you all so much.