Transfer Essay

I just wrote a transfer essay to the following prompt:

Preferred second essay for non-architecture/non-art majors

Choose an issue of importance to you – the issue could be personal, school related, local, political, or international in scope – and write an essay in which you explain the significance of that issue to yourself, your family, your community, or your generation.

I’d love to hear some feedback/things I can do to make it better! Please PM me if you are interested in reading it and giving me a hand!

Thanks!