I’m a UCLA student working on transferring to a couple of schools, and I’ve just written a VERY rough draft of my Georgetown transfer essay (and possibly my Common App transfer essay if it works), and I was wondering if I could get some feedback on it so I could get some ideas as to where I should go when I’m editing (I know this is kind of early for transfer apps lol, but I really want this to be perfect haha). It’s 623 words – there’s a lot more that I’d like to say, but I think I’ve gotten the main points addressed so I don’t want to go over the limit. I’m mainly just afraid that a) it sounds like I’m trashing UCLA a bit too much and b) it doesn’t sound like I have a real NEED to transfer.
Thank you so much in advance!!!