<p>I posted this on different forums but I was advised that I would be better helped here so hope you guys can help me out </p>
<p>here's the post:</p>
<p>Hi and thanks for stopping by like the title says i'm hoping to transfer into a women's college by Spring 2013.</p>
<p>i'm in the application process now and I've already drawn up a draft of my essay and I would like if someone would take the time to read over and help revise my essay. I really need help in order to stand out because the fact is I have a pretty colorful history when it comes to my transcript I was academically dismissed from one school (no there is no sob story I honestly wasn't focused, I was lazy and I paid for my actions) and I am now attending a CC which I have 3.8 and even with this high g.p.a( well what I would consider to be high) it's going to be really hard for an admissions officer to overlook the academic dismissal from my state school. I need a strong and powerful essay that can stand out and although it will not overlook the academic dismissal it will somehow balance it out...to some degree I hope</p>
<p>I need the most help I can get so I would greatly appreciate if one or more of you guys would be willing to help revise and give harsh criticism if needed on this essay. </p>
<p>Just be candid. You’re not the first transfer applicant who was academically dismissed from a college. You grow up a little, you buckle down . . . you get on with your life productively. You will be fine.</p>
<p>You probably will also need a really good character reference who can write about your growth and “growing up” since last time around (applying to schools…) The essay should probably focus most on why you want to go to a women’s school and how you think it will benefit you and the community…</p>
<p>Have you had a sit-down chat with the Transfer Advisor at your current CC? Some are very good at helping students get into their target colleges and universities.</p>
<p>I almost gave up on the post but thank you all for the reply I’ll try to answer all of them @glido thanks for the advice</p>
<p>@dodgersmom that’s fine but thanks for the link</p>
<p>@drmom123 thanks I do have one in mind that probably can help me out but I greatly appreciate your input I probably would not have thought about it </p>
<p>@happymomof1 I spoke to my advisor about the transferring and he’s helping me out along the way although there is no specific “transfer counselor” but thanks anyway</p>
<p>@Class2015 thank you so much I’ll PM it to you as soon as possible </p>
<p>@basil1 I do there’s that I know for sure I’ll apply too and then there are some that are still on the maybe list</p>
<p>but again thanks for all the advise I really appreciate it</p>
<p>I am a community college teacher. I would try for the school you have in mind but have many on your menu, perhaps some that are less selective than Seven Sister schools. Agnes Scott, for example. I worked with one of our students to transfer. She had a 4.0 average but a history at her first college. Just as a benchmark, she was rejected from Barnard but accepted at Sarah Lawrence. I know that this doesn’t say anything about your particular situation, but my advice is to cast your net wide, i.e. apply to as many schools as you can afford to.</p>
<p>If you are older there are special programs at Wellesley and Smith (and perhaps Mt. Holyoke??? I’m not sure.)</p>
<p>Do the research.</p>
<p>Since my job involves reading and grading so many essays, I’m not up for that right now either.</p>
<p>Actually, it appears that many of the women’s colleges have special programs for “non-traditional students” - including older students both with and without families.</p>
but thank you all for the reply I’ll try to answer all of them