UC # 1 & 2 Transferessay - need critique

<p>Can someone please read my personal statements and give me an opinion on it. My English teacher saw it already so I just need an opinion if it's good enough to submit. Thanks for your help</p>

<p>anyone please?</p>

<p>I'll take a look. pm me</p>

<p>i will be the one if you need</p>

<p>I would be glad to help</p>

<p>i'll take a look, pm it over.</p>